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two shapes stood, speaking.
Convenient Eavesdrop 2
Elina was offering a clear enough trade, there simply seemed to be little in it for the Hanik.
driving the pole down time again.
time and again
the suggestion a man – or woman – watching him,
to lay in the muddy earth.
lie
as much a protection from Never than anything else
as... as or more... than
Why did you leave without the jewels?”
why leave the jewels behind.”
?
allowing others, even to travel with him, was
Omit both commas
allegiance to the tenants of the Vadiya God.
tenets
too constricting were his bindings.
The Steelhawks had spread around the room, one was working on a fire
Comma splice
A man stood before it, he waved Never closer.
His skin was pale as the birch that ringed the clearing, it moved only little when he spoke.
“Beyond is a stream, if you listen you’ll hear it.”
Tall but not towering over him, soft brown fur
Dangling modifier
From any other point beyond the first wall – the grove
Comma, not dash
this one was not enclosed, naught but the outer wall shrouded it from
a thin red ‘soup-like’ substance,
Why 'scare quotes'?
Beyond lies the Tindrea Mountains,
lie
He too, was
“That was easy.”
Yeah.
He had changed, his voice was softer
“Peddyr will return soon, in the meantime, let me put you at ease.
And no way to be sure yet, that
“Down the Rinsa River and then to the mighty Carene.
Later on, the rivers' names switch round.
Never had wedged himself between stores in the stern,
glaring over her shoulder.
Who rows facing the bow?
“Try grow accustomed
They moved between the huts; Never having to pause
Comma, not semicolon
no-where to be found.
nowhere
And what was a royal archer doing in Togan
?
Certainly she will – her grandfather wanted him,
would
“Of course... ma’am.” He said.
," he
translucent wings, hung
When Never visited Hanik in the past,
had
what if we head ashore for lunch.
?
It wouldn’t have been much of a risk, the Carene, while growing swifter, hardly seemed choked
fortuitous that he’d stumbled across it, of all the places they might have taken to the bank.
Yeah.
He squinted, how far from the ground was it?
roaring, screaming-droplets
No hyphen
the fisherman was no-where to be seen.
Carrying it on their shoulders, while making the sharp turn, would mean
what was no longer the Carene but now the River Rinsa. Elina
Rivers have switched places.
Gone were the green tendrils of the willows, now it was only dark vines
the river had taken on a blue-shadow.
No hyphen
which task Oksar understood them to be assisting Elina.
with
arranged between the forearms of his skin
skin of his forearms?
To the west, lay
