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he didn’t get drunk or enjoy the favors of the house ladies at the Bootjack very often.
Faint praise.
She led him another league or so north,
A league is, by definition, the distance you can travel in an hour. Not sure the author is fully aware of this.
How could any wife and mother would turn against her family so?
Omit "would"
she had forgotten to bring her gun.
Unlikely
“I suppose wizards have their uses after all.
Seems OOC
“Just keep going down, It all goes to the same place.”
down. It
He dowsed his light,
doused
Take my boat with my blessing,
Spoiled protag? People keep giving him help (and trust) he hasn't earned.
Never climbed with hands pressed against the walls, several times he had to haul himself up,
Comma splice
the top of the first chain.
Aren't all the islands collectively the chain? Wouldn't one be a link?
the ground appeared to hold hints of a once-paved road, some of the stone had a
Comma splice
right Peat?”
right, Peat?" (comma always before term of address)
He checked on the batena, it had reduced nicely, and poured a cup, took a drink and passed it around.
Comma splice
right Peat?”
in a long boat?”
sent us in on longboats,
Be consistent.
sails rended,
rent
think you might be a good sort,
Everyone loves Gary Stu.
He glanced around, maybe there were other hints of life...Never
Comma splice
and even now, stood
No comma before main verb
“Shut up the pair of you.
up, the
the chamber below; the water from which
Should be comma, not semicolon
clothing lain out to dry
laid
Their meal comprised of
"was comprised of" or "comprised"
Who else but such a civilisation would know the secrets of the world
?
allowing the words to standout
stand out
something about the cut of whatever cloth remained, made him
No comma before main verb
“I believe him,” Luis said, his voice quiet. “Do you? And why’s that?”
Because he's the spoiled protagonist.
Down that passage behind us, is the
“Shut-up,”
No hyphen
Where then, were they now?
above the adoring crowds, were
Someone wretched.
retched
Enough of the wood rose and fell with the waves, that
No comma before "that" in this usage
He was apparently well-satisfied
No hyphen
The warm, setting sun
Not coordinate, no comma
for a man to lay curled.
lie
loose scarves hung at the neck, detoured
No comma before main verb - and first of several examples of "detoured" when it should be "detoured around"
placed an arm around shoulder.
since which, he hadn’t
Omit comma
The weight of the pack, the exertion and the returning fever was
were
He sniffed at it before drank.
if he’d ran back
run
Raised voices carried through the trees.
Convenient Eavesdrop
detouring thorny shrubs
detouring around
be honest Never.
honest, Never
the pool, it’s surface a dark green,
its
“You can try race them
