The Third Realm (Ten Realms, #3)

by Michael Chatfield

and

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could only

could, normally, only

the

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Has

Weak Healing Powder has

potions! We

potions!" "We

dead! It’s

dead!" "It’s

tongs

thongs

sound anything

sound like anything,

slingshots

Sling-shots, or slings? They are two different weapons. The people of the Ten Realms would more likely be using slings. Though the tech for sling-shots could be introduced by Eric &/or Rugrat.

series

group

“Covering!” Rugrat yelled. “Moving!” Erik turned and ran back, passing him and heading for where the group was forming up.

This is not the kind of tactics taught in the Navy, but I see the advantages to switching tasks and communicating in this manner.

“You were scared, terrified, but alive; every action you took had a reaction. You had a purpose, a driving force, and it was electric to be part of a team that had real and direct impact. You were running at your peak performance, and it was exhilarating but that fear never left, it never went away, you just had to push it to the side?” Yui said.

Adrenalin high; Fight, Flight, or Freeze Instincts activated.

a

the

okay—will

okay — she will

He was not looking forward to going through being tempered with flames. It didn’t sound particularly relaxing, or fun.

None of the Body Cultivation techniques sound like they would be relaxing, or fun.

Who would have thought military training would be good for Stamina?

Only anyone who has undergone it.

“I’ll call you George after the most noble animal I know,” Rugrat said, nuzzling up to the firewolf.

"I will love him and pet him and call him 'George!'"

melee rushed

melee fighters rushed

Ranged helped

Ranged combatants helped

melee slammed

melee fighters slammed

They were all prepared to lose people or to be killed themselves. At least that’s what they told themselves. But when it was your friend being hit by a massive monster and being poisoned or broken and battered on the ground, those lies that you’ve told yourself hurt like needles jabbing into your stomach.

No one is ever fully prepared to deal with the loss of a friend or loved one. We will all suffer grief until one day we are the cause of another's.

Erik,

Delete this word. Eric would exude poison from his skin to keep the insects away -- as he did previously in the story.

alchemists,

alchemists;

but

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no...

not have had

Competition, not mutual assistance, is what makes things grow here in the Ten Realms,” Matt said.

Unfortunately, such a system results in knowldge being lost and needing to be rediscovered.

sown

sewn

pill.

pill formulas.

weaved

woven

side in

inside

tired

tired,

hit

bounced

missing

dodging

ranged.

ranged fighters.

edge

end

her

she

tor each

to reach

turn from fish into dragons

I think this is a reference to an ancient Chinese folktale or myth, but I can't quite recall the story. If I recall correctly, it involved a fisherman catching a magical carp and receiving a reward for releasing it as it was a celestial dragon in diguise, or something of that order.

so going

so we're going

aims

aim is

less

fewer

her.

she.

full form

full sized form

simple person

person from the lower Realms

increase,

increase;

higher,”

the Alva administration,”

Once one had that insider’s knowledge, that basis of how structures worked, the needs for foundations, of support to keep those grand ceilings up and more, then it turned from a building to a piece of art. Something filled with complexities, with hidden knowledge and information that was passed down generations, evolving and growing. It was no mere “building.” This was the beauty every crafter, every builder and creator could find within their work if they looked—the history behind it, the foundation that others had built and showed them, allowing them to take that and create something truly incredible.

An apt observation.

a simple thing.

an unconsequntial decision.

is

are

something simple.”

an uncomplicated or inexpensive formula."