Kindle Notes & Highlights
Lindsey’s still adjusting to the “tied down” life but, for me it’s not so bad.
doesn’t need a comma
You’re such a faker?” she asked.
Why is this a question?
I stood in the doorway, pulling off my suit jacket and threw it over the back of her computer chair.
throw
They were so much like moms.
Apostrophe????
I sat down next to her on the bad.
Bed?????? Are you for real right now?
her tight voice sounding just a little loser.
looser
we stood our ground again the wall that Lindsey was building between us.
against
Ms. Tuck and I.
Ms. Tuck and me
Ms. Tuck and I
Again…Ms. Tuck and me. Twice on the same page.
I’d stay up all night if I had too,
to
funding for terrorist
What does this even mean????
Don’t’
extra apostrophe
your future is in your big sisters very capable hands.”
sister’s
I stood up, suddenly so tired that I could barely keep my eyes opened.
open
we’d climbed onto the helm of the titanic,
proper noun, should be capitalized as Titanic
The words, Lunch Money were printed
comma does not need to be there
The second part of my problem were the Future Entrepreneurs of the World club,
was
Making long list of things we enjoyed.
What is with the grammar here?
I’d never check all her father’s check boxes.
Doesn’t need two checks.
Lindsey had worked at the dinner for the last two years.
diner
Was it may advice
my
so all of this undercover crap your pulling
you’re
crap
Three times in the past couple of pages.
Cassia’s family were insanely rich.
was
Poor Ms. Tuck had taken care of us for so long, and now look at us?
Should end in a period.
What about the checks? She received for me?
Not a complete sentence, should be joined with the previous one.
Every bill was on order and organized by date,
in
For the six months,
The six months of what?
I know here.
her
They both overdosed on heroine.
heroin
I tried to long to hate her,
so
“When we were in Mexico or China or South African.”
Africa
My dad is Grants god father.”
Missing apostrophe
the most beautiful girl I’ve ever laid eyes.
on is missing
If this girl was mine,
were
Ask for forgiveness rather than permission.
missing quotation marks
He’d even given me underwear that were both supportive and light weight,
was
He
Who is he? Call him the cab driver for establishing purposes.
This guy was no one on trifle with.
to
I’d learned somewhere that giving resect
respect
“I do sir.”
missing comma
“Two years later, she just brought her first Porsche last week.
bought
John put his hand at his daughters back
missing apostrophe
I grinned like a Cheshire cat.
the Cheshire Cat
I turned my attention back to back to him.
extra words
“Favorites? That’s like asking a man to choose his children.
choose between
His mouth pinched, and I wondered when was the last time someone had given this insanely wealthy man anything?
should end on a period
I was heavily leaving on the latter.
leaning
hors de overes.”
hors d’oeuvres…no idea what the hell “hors de overes” are
Hello, Dolly.
This should be stylized as Hello, Dolly! (and in italics).
