Stealing Hearts (St. Mary's Academy #3)

by Seven Steps

Netflix.

Hello, Dolly! was removed from Netflix on July 1st, 2017. This book was published in 2018, making this inaccurate. …how sad is my life that I’m putting this much effort into picking apart a YA book?

“But your hoping this mystery girl will be your girlfriend.”

you’re

I supped on her lower lip,

You what now?

She smelled like paradise. She felt like heaven. She kissed like pure sin.

These are teenagers. What the hell?

we both looked down the hallway at Ms. Tuck’s concerned back.

How can a back be concerned?

“I mean why are you suddenly so okay with me not giving back the money.

Should end in a question mark.

Maybe even setup our next date.

set up should be two words

You snooze. You lose, brother.

That period should be another comma.

And, more importantly, who were they in the first place.

This should end in a question mark.

now I had broken not one, but two perspective dates with her.

prospective

I grinned and handed them her books.

Handed who?

then place my palms on the table.

placed

A bag of sugar and the milk sat next to her. Lindsey loved sweet coffee.

I can infer she likes her coffee sweet by the context clues, thank you very much.

Now, where's my money!”

should end with a question mark

Her eyes went wide, and I feared that we’d bolt at any moment.

We’d? Or she’d?

Mines were too.

Mine Side note, this just sounds so stupid.

I just wanted to get out if here

of

Stack by stack was checked until, finally Tony stopped.

Add another comma after finally, or take out the existing one.

Hiding blanks in with the rest if the cash hoping, I wouldn't notice.”

of, and the comma shouldn’t be there

climbing in my car

You don’t have a car, it’s Jeff’s.

“Times running out.”

missing apostrophe

No. Outpouring of affections.

unnecessary period

I wonder if they’d add onto my prison sentence if I fell asleep right here.

wondered

There are somethings that we were allowed to keep.

some things

Cassia’s big blue eyes

They’re supposed to be green.

my black suite was pressed to perfection.

suit

nowhere as expensive as my previous suite.

suit…again

I took a few pictures of me in my suit,

they

They waved at me when I climbed out the window.

Why are you climbing out a limo window?

I wanted to run my fingers through it and feel it’s softness.

its

hope he wasn’t watching to closely.

too