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moreso
Again and again, indicator of a writer's "tic."
old-fashioned
Seems PC, and frankly, insulting. It is contemptible in fact, and seriously diminishes the author.
of course
Needless to say,
If "Needless to say…," why is author saying it?
of course
Again, author shows laziness and sloppiness in writing.
vacuum to poison gas.
Author makes no mention of one aspect of operating underwater-pressure.
“Hello Lieutenant Jalawi, this is Lieutenant Lassa on Coms. Please hold a moment, the LC is busy on an operational concern… LC? LC, I have Lieutenant Jalawi on coms.”
"'Hello…?'" This dialogue is very bogus.
“Hello Lieutenant Jalawi, this is the LC. The Captain’s getting a little sleep, you’re now on record and will be replayed to him and Commander Shahaim when they wake up. Please go ahead.”
Again bogus dialogue, fully unrealistic.
“I copy that LC. Well, we’re making good progress with the laser. It works fine, but the overheating is just as we were warned… it’s not so bad in the cold water, but we’re not using it for longer than two seconds at a time.
Is he making a status report on ongoing recovery operations, in a high threat/hostile environment, or sending a letter home from summer camp? Author really falls below the mark here and in other spots. It's as if he is overtired, rushing to get pages done, or just going through the motions.
but
luckily
but
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but
but
I guess
I guess
No doubt Styx would know immediately that the Captain was having a conversation he didn’t want her listening to.
Given Styx's proven proficiency with microbots, electronic surveillance, sigint, etc., isn't it unrealistic to suppose she hasn't found a means to listen in?
“I’m fairly sure I saw an assassin bug.
That's no surprise.
“Ordinance
Ordnance
“Where’s my inflight meal?” Jalawi complained. “I wanna refund.” Regan cut him off, grinning madly.
This is much more realistic dialogue. Black humor, dry wit, is ever present with those engaged in close combat. It's not about keeping fear in check so much, as controlling, channeling anger and the adrenaline rush.
Erik had jumped away from Cephilae after stabbing Aristan in the back, suspecting that such action would likely get Lisbeth killed. Thus her true reason for concern. Concern at what it meant for all of them, in his present mental state… whatever that was. But mostly, concern just for him.
Nonsense.
Medbay sometimes didn’t tell the bridge how many injuries had been caused by the latest manoeuvres, in case the bridge got cold feet and didn’t dodge so hard the next time.
More nonsense.
It was the size of a medicine ball, but looked rather more like a tennis ball, with curving grooves that snaked their way around its surface.
Lazy and sloppy manner of description. Using contemporary items to describe an item in a far future.
Kaspowitz told the younger man, somewhat patronisingly.
This whole line of "attitudinal insubordination," or at least insolence, that is exhibited towards the captain by his executive officers, bridge officers, and marine contingent C.O., is rapidly eroding the storyline. No warship's C.O., or in fact, ANY C.O., would be accepting of this breakdown of command authority. Mr. Shepherd, is fully off base.
punching bag,
Heavy bag
“It’s your fault she’s even out here,” he snarled, with genuine fury. “God help you if she’s dead.”
This is another plot line that doesn't come across as reasonable. It's too contrived and unsupported by the relationship established in the first three (3) books.
“Fine. But
Author has addressed to a degree, the undermining of the command cohesiveness. Only to a degree, as Major Trace still seems to think she knows all, and knows better. Her superb abilities has caused a hubris, that is in fact, more dangerous than the captain's flaws.
“Some of us accept that,” she said with steel in her voice. “Others refuse.”
Hubris.
If it was worse than he said, Suelo would probably be lying anyway, as medical staff would often do with bridge queries.
Heck of a way to run a warship.
“Hello Major,
“Hello Captain,
“Hello Captain,”
Might as well just use "AHOY," and be done with it.
“Hello UFS Phoenix,”
“Hello parren warship Stassis,
“I have a feeling
“I have a feeling
“Hello Major,
“I know. Would you like to play a game anyway?”
Sound familiar?
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steady pop! pop! pop!
There’s no way we can defend this place from the deepynines, even if we were united. Disunited we’ve got no chance.
That is nonsensical - can't win united, can't win divided. Author has captain speaking gibberish.
adjusting the cowl and veil where they’d come loose of their hidden velcro…
Geez, who would figure an alien race, millennia older than humans, would be using "…velcro…"?
“Hello
“Hello
but Major Thakur just killed the Domesh leader in a catharan,
One would think EVERYONE AMONGST THE "PHOENIX" COMMAND AND CREW KNOW THAT. Why repeat the obvious and make it seem like new info?
“Hello
“The deepynines are chasing you and the data-core primarily, so we’ll send you both down to the surface with the reconnaissance team.
Was this "Styx's" objective all along? Get off the "Phoenix," with the data core, down to the moon?
Erik could not help but feel a little pleased that Styx liked his idea…
Dangerously childish.
“Hello
