Our eyes meet. Breaths shallow. Heat swells in my throat. Being inside him is so fucking emotional. Like we’re both exactly where we should be. And, shit, I have to hold back some kind of a sob. It’s relief and satisfaction and hot-edged need all wrapped together. It’s so much.
Gah. How can lyrical and "cum" exist in the same story? If you're going for crass, vulgar shock value, fine. Cum heads the list of available words to achieve that goal, at least in my head. Use ANY other word. "Jizz" is less offensive.
But if you're getting into sweet emotional territory, the three-letter non-word version of come absolutely ruins it IMO.
