Iesha (In east shade house at...)’s Comments (group member since May 21, 2013)

Iesha (In east shade house at...)’s comments from the Join the Writing Table! group.

Your story have a swet feel to me mary:)

Go story littleonionwriter I would like to read more

Thank you, o and Assaad your story is pretty cool

Thanks

Here's mine-a rough draft:

Breath, relax. Merry says as she was running along the city streets. It was a cold windy night when she stops running out of breath. She had just reach the park a mile away. She falls to the ground on her knees, her long hair falling down in front of her first as she tips over to the cold ground. She was cold as she lays on the cement. Why was she running? She searches her mind for an answer as she thinks back a couple of hours ago.

She was playing with Tom and Sarah-her best friends. The orphanage was so full of other kids her age that forming groups were important; since some kids were cruel and they would bully others and take they’re stuff. There were three grown-ups that ran the place, and they were outworked and mean at times. Children were adopted, but not many. The economic was in a bad shape and no one wanted to deal with kids right now. Many others were dropped off because they’re parents got tired of them or couldn’t care for them any longer and felt that this was the better place.

The day was normal, like so many Merry had expected. She ate breakfast, she washed and she was send outside to play all day long-only allowed to come in for dinner in the evening, like all others. Living conditions wasn’t so great because of the many children and lack of sponsors. Dinner came and left as Merry was put to bed with the rest. Later into the night, Merry could hear people shouting out side, and then next thing she knew was the building was on fire. Everyone starts to panic and scatters everywhere to get out of the building. Her friend Tom leads the other kids out the door only to be smashed by a broken pillar, and Merry moves out of the way just in time, she had already lost sight of Sarah.

Somehow, Merry finds a way out of the burning building. She runs away out of fear from seeing so many friends died. And there she was on a cold night, lying on the cold cement in front of the park. Her eyes no longer held that live glow, her body was cold. A figure approaches. He was dressed in black, but looked like a gentle man. He kneels down to Merry. Merry smile because he smiled.

“This has been a terrible day for you, little one. No longer will you have to suffer” The man strokes her hair softly. “Those drunken fools-they shouldn’t have taken their anger out on the orphanage. The government was their target, not you” He closes her eyes and pats her once more before a pink orb flows from Merry’s body to the sky.
“ You can go to a peaceful place now” He says turning around and walks away. His wings can be seen in the dim light of the city.

Name: Roxy
Gender: female
Age: 17
Species: Werefox(Half human-half fox
Powers: She can cast spells, has enhance senses, physical and mental strengths: like she really smart and physically powerful. She can change into a seven tail fox.
http://s290.photobucket.com/user/Krat...
Personality: Tough, kind, shy, determined
Appearance: She is 4’ll in height, with emerald eyes. She has long brown hair with white strands that she keeps in a braid. She wears a warrior fox outfit (Similar to this one http://i586.photobucket.com/albums/ss...) She has fox ears and two of her tails can be seen.
Background: She was training to be a creature hunter at the age five. Her family was killed by her mentor when she was ten. She was enslaved by her mentor for five years, until her breast took over and escapes him. She later falls in love with a man who turned her in to her mentor-thus breaking her heart. She escapes before her mentor ever comes for her. Now she wanders thought life not trusting many.
Other: She has a black collar that can’t be removed except by her bondmate.

Yep

I'm in. How long do we have to post it?

Nice, I forgot to mention that Roxy is my own creature:)

Here's her profile which is subjected to change:

Name: Roxy
Gender: female
Age: 17
Species: Werefox(Half human-half fox
Powers: She can cast spells, has enhance senses, physical and mental strengths: like she really smart and physically powerful. She can change into a seven tail fox.
http://s290.photobucket.com/user/Krat...
Personality: Tough, kind, shy, determined
Appearance: She is 4’ll in height, with emerald eyes. She has long brown hair with white strands that she keeps in a braid. She wears a warrior fox outfit (Similar to this one http://i586.photobucket.com/albums/ss...) She has fox ears and two of her tails can be seen.
Background: She was training to be a creature hunter at the age five. Her family was killed by her mentor when she was ten. She was enslaved by her mentor for five years, until her breast took over and escapes him. She later falls in love with a man who turned her in to her mentor-thus breaking her heart. She escapes before her mentor ever comes for her. Now she wanders thought life not trusting many.
Other: She has a black collar that can’t be removed except by her bondmate.

I have my character already, she's a werefox, and on the good side.

Face faceXD

What would our world or land be called, and what creatures would we use-made up ones or already existing one?

K I will:D

I'm up for it:)

Maybe I should try that-my story seems to lack realism

That's what my story I posted in the story thread came from:)

For me, I'm inspired by my emotions. If my emotions are strong, usually the negative ones-my stories usually comes together. I'm also inspired by my dreams:)

I didn't know that can happen lol

Cool what kind of story fiction or non fiction?