tagmeth @ 2016-01-13T17:16:00

Thanks for your responses.  I gather that the passage is problematic, but not overwhelming so.  On the other hand, rereading it I realized that there's another big problem here not apparent in an excerpt so I'm rethinking an important element in the novel as a whole having to do with the dream- and soulscapes.  See?  Any sort of feedback helps.

Tomorrow, back to the barn.  I haven't riden in weeks, by choice, although I continue to do chores.  It isn't clear to me if I've turned into a coward or if I'm being sensible for someone who nearly qualifies for Medicare.  Some of both, probably.  Physical courage gets a lot harder as one ages, and I've had my share of bone-breaking falls, thank you very much.  How lucky Jame is, to age so slowly.