A New Classic?

In a recent post on her blog, talented picture book author Susanna Hill invited readers to participate in her 5th Annual Holiday Contest. The objective was to write a children’s story in 350 words or less that begins with any version of the classic song lyric “Rocking around the Christmas tree at the Christmas party hop.” Examples she offered to set us off in the right direction included “Surfing along the wind-whipped waves at the Yuletide barbecue,” and “Quarreling in the checkout line at the local Toys R Us.”
Always up for a writing challenge, I came up with the following entry. Please let me know what you think with a comment below. Then check back on Tuesday, December 15. I’ll let you know if I’m a finalist, and I’ll provide a link for you to vote on a winner.

 

Undercover in Santa Land
Waiting in line for Santa’s knee

At the mall we always shop.

Suddenly, someone nudges me.

It’s an undercover cop!
You will not believe this crazy story when you hear…

He’s dressed like an elf, by golly!

In my shock, I drop my dolly.
The cop asks for my help, you see.

This is what he has to say:

“Three bullies have been on a spree.

For their stunts they now must pay!”
“They must be stopped,” I do agree

“What kind of help can I bring?”

He replies, “Teamwork is the key.

We will organize a sting.
“Those creeps are smashing candy canes swiped from little kids.

Wait ‘til you get to Santa’s chair.

Then get your cane, and I’ll be there.
“They’ll grab your treat and try to flee.

It will really make my day

To catch them in the act—all three—

And propel them on their way.”
Our plan works out just perfectly.

We make an unlikely team:

An elf cop and a little girl.

Sounds just like a wacky dream!
The mall’s now very safe, you’ll find;

So hop up on Santa’s lap.

Watch out if mischief’s on your mind,

For we’ll set another trap!