An Inexplicable Transposing
Reading the latest anthology to feature my story "Sacrificial Version," you will likely find yourself confused by a sentence in Chapter 6:
"A surgeon peers at an unconscious patient, We’re Roy Street Coffee & Tea! protruding stomach has already been draped and prepared for some procedure."
Why promote a Seattle-based cafe mid-sentence? Is it some kind of allusion to the ever-increasing intrusiveness of advertising? Honestly, I have no idea, as I'd never heard of the establishment prior to its mysterious manifestation within my story.
My version of the sentence, as submitted with my manuscript, reads:
"A surgeon peers at an unconscious patient, whose protruding stomach has already been draped and prepared for some procedure."
After emailing an editor, I have been assured that the sentence will be corrected in the book's future printings.
"A surgeon peers at an unconscious patient, We’re Roy Street Coffee & Tea! protruding stomach has already been draped and prepared for some procedure."
Why promote a Seattle-based cafe mid-sentence? Is it some kind of allusion to the ever-increasing intrusiveness of advertising? Honestly, I have no idea, as I'd never heard of the establishment prior to its mysterious manifestation within my story.
My version of the sentence, as submitted with my manuscript, reads:
"A surgeon peers at an unconscious patient, whose protruding stomach has already been draped and prepared for some procedure."
After emailing an editor, I have been assured that the sentence will be corrected in the book's future printings.
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