My All: An Ode

Writing 201, Poetry, Day 5: Map, Ode, Metaphor


Tropical Springtime Wildflowers


My All


My Jesus, I love you


Like I love no other


You are my all in all


My Jesus you lift me


On wings of eagles


You are my all in all


When no one was with me


You cared and gave comfort


You were my all in all


To be like you, Jesus


Is my ambition


To love as you do, Lord


Is my mission


I love you, I love you, I love you Jesus


You are my all in all


The Process


I took some time coming up with this because I understand that the ode is lyrical by nature, i.e., it’s a  poem that can double as a song when not irregular. Ergo, I decided to write song lyrics instead of just a poem, which meant triple the work.


I started out with a poem. An ode is celebratory, praise or an expression of love, so it had to be about God for me. The rest needs to work for that sort of acclaim. Here’s the original poem, which was just anything that popped into my mind jotted down on paper:


Ode to Jesus


My Jesus, I love you


Like no other


No one can compare


You are my all


When no one was there


You were my all


To be like you


Is my ambition


To love as you do


Is my mission


I love you, I love you, I love you


You are my all in all


Bonus points if you get the trinity reference.


This was okay, but it wasn’t metered. I’d planned to use a metronome for metering, but a massive thunderstorm in the afternoon knocked out the electricity and after that I simply couldn’t be bothered, so it was on to plan B: I used my fingers to count the lyrical beats of songs I liked, then to count the syllables in the poem, adjusting the wording as necessary to get threes, fours and sixes. This meant I had to get out my pen and paper and rewrite the poem. Once the lyrics looked okay on paper, it was time to polish everything up: how would they sound when sung?


The electricity was back, so I used a Yahama keyboard as it doesn’t seem to care that I know next to nothing about music.


Elise waiting for me to attempt to play Elise waiting for me to attempt to play “Fur Elise.”

I pushed the “music database” button and started with the first thing that popped up, “Hey Jude.” I started singing (wailing?) in the rain and managed to wake up pretty much the entire neighbourhood, which ended up working to my advantage as I got lots of unsolicited feedback.


I sang and played random notes until a tune started to emerge. Any awkward lyrics became obvious and corrections were made. I added lines and made changes until the song felt smooth to my ears.


I then proceeded to turn the music selection wheel and played many different styles and keys until I finally hit what sounded like song jackpot. If you want to try it at home, I settled on music database item no. 33, “YesterBd,” and played in what I believe was the key of F (major).


Sweet.


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