Help Me, Please – Part III-V

If you have read the STRAIGHT INTO DARKNESS, please tell me if you found errors, typos and/or missing words? I am getting ready to upload to Ingram, so that I can sell in bookstores around the country and so libraries will order the book. Now each time I upload interiors to Ingram it costs me $30, so I want this to be the best it possibly can be at this time.

This appears the week that I ask for help. Earlier in the week I asked for reviews from folks who had read TOILS AND SNARES. Then I ask...