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Maria
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Aug 28, 2015 05:19PM
you... tease!!! Finish it :)
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you need to finish this book, I need to know what is going on. You have some serious talent. Please continue!
As this is your first chapter, well you've got the hook already, I'm sure everyone who's read that chapter will want to read more, and more, I'm sure. We all would like to know what Carter is doing in Spanish, Why he's there? Why Dalton is in Asa's house, what is he doing there ,why is he there, who's he watching , or is he watching anyone?So many questions need answering.
So have a break for a few weeks and write , write, and let us know how you are getting on, tell us their story...
...and I'm Hooked! You can do no wrong in my eyes, I'd read your grocery list (too much?). I like that your female characters aren't whiny damsels in distress. This may have been done in so many books, but what about a love triangle where there's the bad guy that you know you shouldn't date, but you do. You go into it thinking "oh its just physical/ for fun" and then you meet the good guy, who of course becomes your best friend, and doesn't like that the bad boy treats you like crap. So you sort of begin to date both (one is the physical boyfriend and the other is more emotional). You try to leave them both, but cant seem to do it until you realize you cant live with out your best friend...and then they live happily ever after :)












