Dragons of Wellsdeep – pages 12 & 13 edit

The drafts on toparethe original manuscript pagesas it has been written. On the bottom aremy edit drafts with my handwritten comments.

I found page 12 surprisingly clean, but again there is a lot of dialogue. Still, there are some actions that can be cleared up. This would also be a good page to insert more setting if I found that I needed some room. I’ve found that if I come across a scene where additional dialogue or action can be added, then the scene wasn’t pulling it’s weight in the...