Weekend Writing Warriors-New WIP Snippet 4

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors, the perfect place to discover new authors and fall in love with their writing. Each Sunday we share 8 to 10 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating.

The new story so far has no title and no blurb. This snippet is a page or two after last week’s. Ana needed help with her car and Jace agreed to look at it that afternoon, but when he realized she needed the car he checked it out right then and there. He found something that could have been the cause of the red light and fixes it. I thought after spending some time with Jace we should hang out with Ana for a bit and see her response to Jace. She’s just left the garage and hopes the problem has been dealt with, once and for all. We are in Ana’s point of view.

“Maybe a tiny bit of a shame as out of all the garages she’d been to and all the mechanics she’d spoken to in the last couple of weeks Jace Deegan definitely stood out. He was big. She stood at five nine and he still towered over her. And even in his overall he was ripped. He’d look fabulous on the front cover of one the romance novels she bought for her day job. Maybe with a shoulder holsters over his bare chest. Or, even better, his overall curled up around his waist, his chest gleaming with sweat and a touch of grease, and a wrench or whatever a mechanic holds in his hand.

No face because readers wanted to use their own imagination for the hero, which in this instance would be a real shame as his face matched his body. She had a feeling his shoulder-length blond hair would turn lighter once the sun came out. And those green eyes-Ana sighed.”

What works, what doesn’t?

The PanAm Games have come to Toronto. Usually I would avoid downtown like the plague but it’s a friend’s birthday, so I will brave the masses. At least the Games mean that all public transport will actually be running.

And of course some more inspiration…