Weekend Writing Warriors-New WIP Snippet 2

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors, the perfect place to discover new authors and fall in love with their writing. Each Sunday we share 8 to 10 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating.

Thank you all so much for your kind words about my new and still slightly fragile WIP. The encouragement you have shared is wonderful:).

The new story so far has no title and no blurb. Last week a high-end SUV drove up to Jace’s garage (which still needs a name if you have suggestions;) and the driver did not appear to be in a happy mood as she climbed down.

“She strode toward him, frustration rolling off her in waves. But something else as well, something that made the hairs on the back of his neck rise and tension invade his body: fear.

“Good morning,” she said, attempting a smile.

“Morning,” he replied, intrigued that she tried not to let her feelings affect her manners. “Jace Deegan, owner.” That kind of restraint did not fit with what he’d expected from the driver of the SUV. “How can I help?” He reminded himself that it was his job to be nice to customers. Usually Savannah took care of these kinds of things, but she was off today.

More importantly, he needed to remember he was only here to help with her car-he’d hung up his damsel-in-distress-saving shoes when he came home from Afghanistan.”

What works, what doesn’t? Is the opening compelling enough for you to continue reading?

I somehow stumbled into writing about an ex-soldier who is now a mechanic. Visuals usually help, so here are a couple of inspirational pictures (in case you’re wondering, Jace would have no reason to roll around in grease and he’s wearing a shirt, so these are just thought starters;).

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Have a wonderful Sunday and Happy Writing!