Weekend Writing Warriors-Steampunk WIP Snippet 1

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I’m sharing the opening of my current work in progress FPWL. The first draft is mostly done, but I made some changes in the second half of the book, which means I now have to go back and ensure continuity. It’s a companion novel to Dirigibles Are Forever and hopefully the beginning of a trilogy. It’s still pretty raw, so please be gentle;).


“Clara Redbeck, currently travelling under the name Clara Riesenbeck—it always made it easier to stick close to the truth—paused at the bottom of the ramp and studied the Bismarck. The dirigible was one of the modern multi-level models and would take her all the way from Tilsit, on the east coast of Prussia, to London. Or as far as she had to go before she could disembark.


Clara had a plan and this plan involved showing the knobs at work that she was more than capable of fulfilling this mission. Alone and without being dependent on untrustworthy partners. Untrustworthy male partners. It would be a very, very long time until she trusted a man again.


She swiped her ticket barcode through the automated steward’s facade and the barricade opened. With a smile to the camera she picked up her hand luggage and walked up the ramp.”


What works, what doesn’t? Is the second paragraph too much?


Toronto is in a deep freeze at the moment, the windchill putting us at around -21C (-5.8F). Just a wee bit nippy. Any trip into the outside world has to be planned in minute detail to ensure you spend as little time as possible out of the warmth. Wherever you are I hope you’re staying nice and warm;).


Have a wonderful Sunday and Happy Writing!


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Published on January 11, 2015 05:02
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