Here's the second in the series.
He stood on the opposite pavement, a tall man in a calf-length overcoat
Now read it again, and this time think about that phrase. List the questions it throws up. This is the sort of thing you should be aiming for:
The He denotes that someone else is seeing this person - and give the reader a break... please don't make the narrator an off-page
Published on December 10, 2014 00:00