Tighten writing by deleting unneeded attribution

If introducing a character through some action, there's no need to add that they “said” something and then provide their line of dialogue. Simply describing what they're doing is sufficient to show that they are giving the next line of spoken dialogue - so long as that dialogue appears in the same paragraph as their described action.

For example, instead of writing:

The nurse decided to step in. She said, “Sweetheart we need to redo these stitches and then get you into surgery and fast. It is dangerous for you to be losing this much blood.”

Write this:

The nurse decided to step in. “Sweetheart, we need to redo these stitches and then get you into surgery and fast. It is dangerous for you to be losing this much blood.”

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