Weekend Writing Warriors-Tangled Redemption Snippet 4

Welcome to the Weekend Writing Warriors. Each Sunday we share 8 sentences from a current or finished manuscript. Click here for the rest of the amazing writers participating.

I am continuing to share the opening of my WIP, Tangled Redemption, book 4 in the Celestial Surrender series. It is not yet finished and has not been polished;). I don’t have a blurb yet either, but I will try and give you some context. My heroine is Sydney. We meet her for the first time in Tangled Hunger, book 2 of the Celestial Surrender series. Circumstances I cannot go into without spoiling everything result in her being kidnapped by a Vampire who has the impossible task of balancing the survival of one with that of a galaxy.

Tangled Redemption is a Sci-Fi story and takes place in a universe inhabited by humans, Vampires and Naema, a race that has been likened to angels. There is a tenuous peace between the three races, but a faction of the Vampires, the Ferals, does not want to bow down to human law. You could say there is a smidgeon of tension between them and the rest of the galaxy, expressed through a kill-on-sight order against them.

This snippet is a little after last week’s. Sydney had been attacked by three Ferals. She managed to take out one and Miguel Calatrave, her kidnapper, took out a second. When she tells him she will not allow anyone to drink her blood, he challenges her to ensure her reputation stops more attacks. There is still one more Feral she has to face…

“Her chest tightened and she looked back into Calatrave’s jet-black eyes; his expression was impassive, but something in his eyes gave her strength.

The first one had been self-defense.

The next one had to be an execution.

She had killed once before.

A traitor to their country and their planet.

A traitor to their species.

A traitor to her.

Her husband.”

This is still very raw, so any and all comments are welcome.

The first draft of Tangled Redemption is done (happy dance), but it’s a bit of a mess. I am working through and am hoping I will get it in good enough shape to send to my critique partner tonight. I will do my best to get to everyone before the marathon starts;).

Have an amazing week and as always Happy Writing!