Celebrating Small Things & Recounting Some Writing Experience, Especially Loglines and Taglines

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This week my small celebrations are:

finishing line edits ahead of schedule on Double Negative.writing one short story for Heroes of Phenomena Book Launch.
composing a fairly decent logline and tagline for Double Negative. (See below.) staying cool during our 102 degree day. Yuck!
Oh, and not succumbing to my triskaidekaphobia today.


Oh no! Not Friday the Thirteenth.

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I'm visiting another UNCOMMONYA author this week, MELISSA WRAY. It would be great if you'd stop by. You can read me in my verbose, writer mode. It happens sometimes.
MELISSA WRAY, AUTHOR OF DESTINY ROAD

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Are you good at writing LOGLINES or TAGLINES? It takes some practice, I can tell. You. And are you clear on how these two are different? If not, here's what I know about them.
LOGLINES tell you in a single sentence what the story is about.TAGLINES are intended to catch your interest.
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An example: Jaws
Logline: A sheriff must find and kill a man-eating and frighteningly intelligent shark before it murders again and scares away all the tourists who support his beach-front community.

Tag Line: Don’t go into the water.

Tell me what  you think about mine. I could use some help if you see where these could be better, please tell me. 
Double Negative
Logline: Shackled by near illiteracy, a teenage boy decides escape from his alcoholic mother and absentee father will give him a better life, but his bad choices trap him in even a worse place.
Tagline: Going to juvie wasn’t part of his escape plan. (I'm still fiddling with this one. I may be back with another version next week.)


Are you celebrating anything this week? Are you good at loglines and taglines? Triskaidekaphobia much?
Sliding on the Edge, C. Lee McKenzie, WestSide Books, Spring '09
The Princess of Las Pulgas, WestSide Books, Fall '10
The First Time, Fall '11 (Anthology story: Premeditated Cat)
Alligators Overhead, Outskirts Press, Fall '12
Two and Twenty Dark Tales (Anthology story: Into the Sea of Dew