Deleted words poetry (OOP4)

I’m doing the final edit pass on OOP4, and this is where little words and unnecessary sentences fall out of the text. I paste them into an “unused” file, and sometimes they fall into kind of a poetic order.


Like so (presented unchanged–the single letter ‘h’ is probably because that word became the beginning of a sentence and so the lowercase ‘h’ was replaced with a capital ‘H’ but the rest of the word remained intact):


Sunday night we’re all sitting around in the bar, and h


and I have questions for him anyway


so I go over to talk to him. He’s


even though he’s not drinking


and let him finish, and


from him


but I seem to be


“Thanks,” I say.


Just would


can’t believe nobody knows this and at the same time i


points at me


at all


a bit


to play an


team


Fair enough


goes immediately to imagining


and I’d be


a little


, and stare at the screen


that would just be the wrong thing to do after insisting I feel better


it’s too late, and


under their breath


none of whom are


“Just had to tell them who you were?” I say, watching


on the way over


Strike is still talking.

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Published on May 04, 2014 23:35
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message 1: by Honeyscoot (new)

Honeyscoot Possibly the best way to end it. After everything is said, after all of this, "Strike is STILL talking."

But it's a very creative way to make use of the small errors. Very entertaining. :3


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