Description

I was working through a revision of my new manuscript and I realized that sometimes my language wasn't as precise as it could be because I wasn't showing or telling the reader what was going on in my character's mind. Also in description, I wasn't always putting the reader there by being there with my character. What did the way he saw his surroundings mean to how he was experiencing what was happening? This is at a language level; it's so important to making a connection with the reader.

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