Construction Zone: Down to the Bones

I've talked about this before, but now that I've actually completed revisions on a story where I put it to a big test, I wanted to revisit the idea. When I need to rework a sentence in my work, I've been using novels (any novel), to find a sentence that is similar to what I want mine to be, and using the grammatical structure to rework my own sentence. I use traditionally published novels for this for two reasons: I can be sure that even though it's probably not perfect, it's had a...