Rhythm as alarm system

The first thing I read this morning, while eating my quinoa flakes, was Kate Elliott's excellent post about how she knows a scene needs to be rewritten:

The medium answer is:

I feel uncomfortable with it (see: "I just know" above) because:

the rhythm feels wrong when I re-read it. The rhythm of a scene should flow smoothly and inevitably for however you are defining inevitability — you should never catch or stumble over the flow of action and conversation.

Or: the characters aren't doing...