Revising long after, part 2

This is the next part of Chapter 1 of Shadow Magic, as revised ten years later for Shadows Over Lyra. Plain text is the original version; strikethrough is what I deleted; boldface is what I added. Italics are my comments on why I did what I did.

"I'll mind," Maurin muttered, too low for Har to hear.

"There's still Master Goldar."

"Fear not, my friend," Har said, striking a theatrical pose. "We shall yet win for you the freedom of the city, overcoming all objections of . . . " His speech was...