Revising long after part 3

This is the third part of Chapter 1 of Shadow Magic, as revised ten years later for Shadows Over Lyra, and the second of the posts that was supposed to come up while I was away, but didn't because I am apparently incapable of properly using the scheduler. The final part will go up tomorrow. Plain text is the original version; strikethrough is what I deleted; boldface is what I added. Italics are my comments on why I did what I did.

A long whistle from Har brought Maurin's eyes down, and he As...