Fellow Writer Needs Help #7 Revised
The writer of Summer Query Extravaganza #7 needs your help. There is an agent with a wish list of manuscripts with 20th century historical significance. #7 has been revised, but please help out with suggestions and insight so this writer can send a fabulous query to that agent.
The world of the twentieth century teaches Horace to value his white skin, because a black-skinned person never amounts to anything. Never, that is, until a black piano player named Scott Joplin teaches Horace that his world might just be wrong. I would replace the second 'teaches' with 'shows.'
That meeting prompts a lifelong struggle in which Horace learns to fly—with lessons from a pair of Ohio bicycle shop owners—becomes a professional baseball player, befriends pioneers in the theater world, and encounters a civil rights champion who causes Horace to question everything he once believed was true about the colors of human skin. Aerial victories and tragic losses mark every step of Horace’s journey, but ultimately his life and all his travels will come down to one decision ... THE LAST CHANCE. Much better. This is now focused on Horace's journey. Perhaps be more specific about the 'tragic losses.'
THE LAST CHANCE is a 106,000-word historical novel that views the twentieth century through the eyes of a racist caught between his opinion and the truth. Bring a box of tissues. It’s called THE LAST CHANCE for a reason.
THE LAST CHANCE will appeal to fans of Patrick Smith’s A Land Remembered and Pete Hamill’s Forever: A Novel.
Thank you for your time and consideration
The world of the twentieth century teaches Horace to value his white skin, because a black-skinned person never amounts to anything. Never, that is, until a black piano player named Scott Joplin teaches Horace that his world might just be wrong. I would replace the second 'teaches' with 'shows.'
That meeting prompts a lifelong struggle in which Horace learns to fly—with lessons from a pair of Ohio bicycle shop owners—becomes a professional baseball player, befriends pioneers in the theater world, and encounters a civil rights champion who causes Horace to question everything he once believed was true about the colors of human skin. Aerial victories and tragic losses mark every step of Horace’s journey, but ultimately his life and all his travels will come down to one decision ... THE LAST CHANCE. Much better. This is now focused on Horace's journey. Perhaps be more specific about the 'tragic losses.'
THE LAST CHANCE is a 106,000-word historical novel that views the twentieth century through the eyes of a racist caught between his opinion and the truth. Bring a box of tissues. It’s called THE LAST CHANCE for a reason.
THE LAST CHANCE will appeal to fans of Patrick Smith’s A Land Remembered and Pete Hamill’s Forever: A Novel.
Thank you for your time and consideration
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