Just reading your poem and admiring it's honest simplicity. In my work, I am always striving to cut out everything that is unessential. Feel free to check out my page and poetry sometime. I think you might like it.

Thanks for reading :) I try and do that in some of my poems - sometimes I really do feel like its good to tear through everything and go straight to the purity of the poem, the essence of the idea. I’ll check yours out too :)