Good day's work

Got a lot done yesterday, and I'm back where I was on Friday night, which I didn't expect.One more day ought to do it, and then I can print out and send.  Yay!  Every rewrite is different for me, even if the same basic steps are involved.  This one was less about tweaking emotion, (though I did that in a few places) and not much about story logic (but I tweaked a couple of spots for that, too.)  The overriding theme of this rewrite was shifting elements to quicken story flow and to keep it...