Point of View in the Donaghue and Stainer Crime Novel Series

Point of view is, without a doubt, one of the most important elements of fiction. Almost everyone is familiar with the basics of point of view, but it doesn’t hurt to review them briefly so that we’re all on the same page (pun intended). As M.H. Abrams explains in A Glossary of Literary Terms, “point of view signifies the way a story gets told – the perspective or perspectives established by an author through which the reader is presented with the characters, actions, setting, and events which constitute the narrative in a work of fiction.”

As an author you can use first-person narrative to bring the reader very close to the main character whose point of view they will follow throughout the story. Tone of voice, vocabulary, regional expressions, level of awareness, and other elements used in first-person narrative contribute to our understanding of the personality and outlook of the hero, and they must be carefully controlled. How many times have you read a book where the first-person hero uses words in descriptive passages they would never use in dialogue? Or randomly slips in and out of slang? When using first-person, the author must maintain careful control of the narrative because it is the very embodiment of their main character, and readers demand consistency.

Third-person narrative offers another set of choices. The narrator may be omniscient, godlike in their knowledge of all things happening in the universe of this story. Omniscient narrators can be impersonal, reporting without bias, or intrusive, providing us with editorial comments, judgments, and opinions in little speeches here and there, functioning almost as another character, albeit at a superior level.

Alternatively, a third-person narrator may take a limited approach, restricting our view to the main character only, telling a story much the same way as in first person but maintaining a distance, often ironic, between the narrator and the third-person central character.

How to decide among these many ways to tell your story? Many beginning writers choose first person because they don’t feel a great deal of difference between themselves as author and their narrator as hero. Sometimes, then, the inconsistencies I mentioned above creep into the story. But if a writer maintains a solid control over first person, and understands the importance of keeping a bit of distance between author and narrator (there is a difference, because this is fiction), this choice can be extremely effective because it can engage the reader much more intimately than third person. The gap between narrator and reader becomes quite small, and the reader readily identifies with your hero. Mission accomplished!

Third-person narrative gives you much more room to maneuver as a storyteller. It allows you, for example, to shift between the perspectives of hero and antagonist or among several key characters, while still maintaining the omniscient control of the godlike narrator. Your narrator functions like the conductor of a symphony orchestra, bringing each section into the foreground in turn as the music dictates. (But you must be careful not to shift among too many characters, or it will become too confusing.)

How you choose to narrate your story determines how your readers experience it. Regardless of the point of view adopted, the best narration is transparent and seamless: it doesn’t intrude, distract or confuse. The Donaghue and Stainer Crime Novel series is told from the perspectives of Hank Donaghue and Karen Stainer themselves with additional perspectives added, such as that of Peter Mah in Blood Passage and Billy Askew in Marcie's Murder, as a counterpoint and to help develop the narrative.

As a reader, which point of view do you prefer?
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Published on March 03, 2013 17:57 Tags: blood-passage, m-h-abrams, marcie-s-murder
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message 1: by Cary (new)

Cary Neeper Thanks for this very useful summary, Michael. I agree whole-heartedly with your descriptions of POV. However, my publisher and I decided that the story in The Webs of Varok required one primary first-person POV--to get up close and personal with the human protagonist--and a few other limited third-person POVs, carefully entitled with the character's name at each change. We had some good fun with this, especially looking at things from within the head of a flying insectoid who plays a large part in the plot. A tight third person was also useful when encountering the varokian "mind-block"--a metaphor of how we humans deal with the serious issues portrayed in the book. We would be pleased to offer you a copy of the book if you would review it for us. Please email me at cary@caryneeper.com if you have the time and interest.


message 2: by Michael (new)

Michael McCann Cary wrote: "Thanks for this very useful summary, Michael. I agree whole-heartedly with your descriptions of POV. However, my publisher and I decided that the story in The Webs of Varok required one primary fir..." Thanks for your comment, Cary. Sounds like you took on a very challenging task, especially writing from the point of view of a flying insectoid. Makes me think, off the top of my head, of Robert L. Asprin's The Bug Wars, written from an alien point of view. Not easy to do successfully. Well done!


message 3: by Cary (new)

Cary Neeper Thanks, I'll take a look at The Bug Wars.


message 4: by Briana (new)

Briana I have a question for writing in first person POV.

I have a character who speaks with a specific dialect (uses "ain't" for example). Should the narrative (thoughts of the character) also use this dialect? I have heard that it becomes overkill and can be a turn off to a reader. Also, part of the character's character is that his speech deflects from his inner intelligence and perceptiveness.

However, I can also see the argument for consistency.How do you decide?


message 5: by Michael (new)

Michael McCann Great question, Briana, and one that touches on a definite challenge posed by first-person narrative.

Consistency is important, for sure. You wouldn't expect a character's inner voice to sound like a university professor while his speaking voice sounds like a backwoodsman; the difference would destroy the credibility of the narrative. On the other hand, too much dialect, as you say, is definitely overkill. I've put down more than one book for this reason, alone.

When in doubt, I always look for a model, and the best model in this case might be Huckleberry Finn. Twain told Huck's story in first person from Huck's point of view, and we all know how uneducated Huck's speech was; so, what did Twain do with Huck's narrative voice? Here's a brief example:

"Git up and hump yourself, Jim! There ain't a minute to lose. They're after us!"

Jim never asked no questions, he never said a word; but the way he worked for the next half an hour showed about how he was scared. By that time everything we had in the world was on our raft and she was ready to be shoved out from the willow cove where she was hid. We put out the camp fire at the cavern the first thing, and didn't show a candle outside after that. [from Chapt. 11]

You can see that Huck's dialogue is pure Huck, but the narrative voice is more carefully crafted. Twain uses a double negative, "hid" instead of "hidden," and other informal constructions to convey Huck's unsophisticated grasp of language, but otherwise the narrative reads smoothly and clearly. If we take a step backward, we could say that perhaps Twain was helping Huck tell his story in a way that would be easy to read and would convey Huck's innate intelligence and potential for maturity, yet while reading it up close, we believe it's Huck's voice all the way.

You might try reading a chapter or two to get a feel for what Twain was doing with his narrative and to watch how he kept this balance between dialect and plain prose.

I hope this helps! Mike.


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