Friday: Work Day

Today was another slog at revisions--the "write sentence, remove half the words, shift over one, and repeat..."  sort.   I know what needs to be done in the scene, but there's no flow at all, and it's crucial that every nuance carry to the reader.   Right now the reader would be going "ouch-ouch-ouch" from the roughness, like walking on sharp stones, when what need to happen is a slow flow of information to the backbrain without tickling analysis.  Yet.

If that's not sufficiently obscure, I...