Playing with my blurb
Hunh, that title sounds dirty somehow, yet it isn’t lol. I guess I know where my mind is this morning. Hehehe.
But back to my situation. I’m almost done Book Four in my Alien Abduction series, but for the first time in a while, I am struggling with the darned blurb. Two short paragraphs, that’s all I need, plus a catchy tagline, and yet they’re giving me such a hard time.
I’ve tried to do my usual couple of line summary for the main characters, but nothing works. Well, at least nothing I liked enough to save. So I did something a little different, but I’m not sure if I like it either. Even though the story is told in third person, I wrote the blurb primarily in first. This is the result (rough draft!!)
“He thought her an innocent, human virgin. She thought him a cold blooded killer. How wrong they both were — and so perfect for each other.
Greetings, Earthlings. I am Makl, a fearsome Galactic Warrior, and this is my story of mercenary abduction, an adventure filled with violence, mayhem and daring deeds. Live my passion and lust for the most unlikely creature, a human barbarian, a female I was fooled into thinking a prized virgin. Captivated by her pale skin and her two breasted frame, I stole her, or at least I meant to. That plan kind of went awry. But we ended up together despite it all, an unstoppable duo. We are famous beyond imagining, and therein lies the problem. I want to keep her, but I’m not ready to settle down and give up a life of adventure. Usually I don’t have a problem ditching my bed partners, so I don’t understand why the thought of losing her fills me with rage—and fear?
For the first time in my life, the Mercenary’s Guide to Prosperity doesn’t have an answer to my questions, and I don’t know who to kill to fix this — other than anyone who lusts after her.
Is it time I reevaluated my life or should I admit that maybe my cousins are right when they say love is the most priceless goal of all?
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Yeah, so that’s what I’ve got. I don’t know if I like it. So, I’m constantly getting distracted tweaking it. What do you think?
