Speed editing, continued

Here’s a line that I like from Chapter Four of my novel-in-progress:

Perhaps the lounge lizard look appealed to some women, but to Holly he looked like an overaged pool boy who’d watched too many reruns of The Lifestyles of the Rich and Famous.

Editing my own work is a challenge but I did spot a point-of-view problem. I’m always critiquing other writing for POV problems so I’m glad I weeded one out of my own workg!