Brainstorming

Many thanks for all of the suggestions. I've printed them out and am going over them carefully. Already I can see one problem: I've started the chapter at the wrong point. Backing it up will allow for the inclusion of several of the suggested ideas. A bigger problem is that the novel as plotted so far ends with Tori doing something stupid re: Jame. He does learn by it, though, so maybe that's all right. It's my experience that sometimes it takes something dramatic to alter a mind that'...