Feedback Request

Below is a revised version of Face-Lift 566. The comment trail there was so long (it includes requests from several minions to post a revised version) that I've put the new version here so you don't have to scroll down a mile to find it. The title is new, but though I did put the title in the query queue, it didn't generate five fake plots, so no Guess the Plot.


Dear Evil Editor,

I am seeking representation for my book, Traitor, a 130,000 word epic fantasy.

Khirsha is a young warrior of eighteen wh