Under the Light, rough

Well, I finished a rough draft of UNDER THE LIGHT.

Now I'm going through, chapter by chapter, and in addition to revising for the big stuff (answering questions like, "Do I love this part? Does this feel right?") I'm also checking for the following things as I read and rewrite:

Is the voice right? Jenny (my first person narrator) needs to sound like herself.

Am I aiming at the crosshairs of the chapter? (See my blog post from 10/30/09 to learn more about crosshairs.)

Are there any transitions...