Tautology in Writing: What It Is and How to Avoid It in Your Fiction
Hello again fellow fiction writers.
Writers love words. Sometimes we love them too much. We pile them on, thinking we’re being clear, only to end up saying the same thing twice in slightly different ways. That’s called tautology, and it can weigh your prose down like bricks in a backpack.
The good news? Once you know how to spot tautology, it’s easy to trim it out and let your sentences breathe.
🎯 What Is Tautology?
A tautology is when you use two or more words that mean the same thing, creating needless repetition. It doesn’t add clarity—it just bloats your sentence.
Think of it as a verbal echo. Your brain already heard it once; it doesn’t need the encore.
✏️ Common Examples of Tautology
Here are some everyday examples you’ve probably seen (or written):Free gift (aren’t all gifts free?)Advance planning (as opposed to planning in the past?)Final outcome (just say “outcome”)Added bonus (bonus already means something extra)Close proximity (proximity already implies closeness)Past history (all history is in the past)
🧠 Why Tautology Trips Writers Up
Fiction writers often slip into tautology without realising it. Why? Because when we’re drafting, we’re focused on getting the idea across, not polishing. We throw in “extra” words to feel safe, to hammer home our point. But instead of helping, those words drag the pace and make your prose feel clumsy.
👣 A Personal Oops Moment
In one of my early stories, I wrote:
“He nodded his head in agreement.”
Of course he did—what else would he nod? His elbows? My beta reader circled it and wrote, “Your characters nodding heads is getting redundant. Just say ‘he nodded.’” It was a small cut, but the whole paragraph instantly read cleaner.
✅ How to Spot and Fix Tautology
Here are some quick tips to hunt down tautology in your drafts:Look for redundancy in phrases.“She whispered softly” → “She whispered.”“He shouted loudly” → “He shouted.”Trust strong words to do their job.
If you write “sprinted,” you don’t need “quickly.”Watch out for double modifiers.“Absolutely essential” → “Essential.”“Unexpected surprise” → “Surprise.”Read aloud.
Your ear will catch what your eyes miss. If it sounds repetitive, it probably is.
📝 Examples in Fiction
Tautology (weak):
She sat down on the chair and looked at the red-coloured rose.
Tighter version:
She sat on the chair and looked at the red rose.
Tautology (weak):
He kicked the ball with his foot.
Tighter version:
He kicked the ball.
See how cutting those redundancies makes the prose sharper?
🎬 Wrapping It Up
Tautology isn’t the end of the world—it’s just one of those sneaky habits we all fall into. But trimming it out makes your writing cleaner, faster, and more professional.
So the next time you revise, hunt down those redundant echoes. Your readers will thank you, and your prose will thank you too.
Your turn: What tautology do you find sneaking into your drafts? Drop it in the comments—I promise, you’re not the only one. I answer all comments personally.
James
Writers love words. Sometimes we love them too much. We pile them on, thinking we’re being clear, only to end up saying the same thing twice in slightly different ways. That’s called tautology, and it can weigh your prose down like bricks in a backpack.
The good news? Once you know how to spot tautology, it’s easy to trim it out and let your sentences breathe.
🎯 What Is Tautology?
A tautology is when you use two or more words that mean the same thing, creating needless repetition. It doesn’t add clarity—it just bloats your sentence.
Think of it as a verbal echo. Your brain already heard it once; it doesn’t need the encore.
✏️ Common Examples of Tautology
Here are some everyday examples you’ve probably seen (or written):Free gift (aren’t all gifts free?)Advance planning (as opposed to planning in the past?)Final outcome (just say “outcome”)Added bonus (bonus already means something extra)Close proximity (proximity already implies closeness)Past history (all history is in the past)
🧠 Why Tautology Trips Writers Up
Fiction writers often slip into tautology without realising it. Why? Because when we’re drafting, we’re focused on getting the idea across, not polishing. We throw in “extra” words to feel safe, to hammer home our point. But instead of helping, those words drag the pace and make your prose feel clumsy.
👣 A Personal Oops Moment
In one of my early stories, I wrote:
“He nodded his head in agreement.”
Of course he did—what else would he nod? His elbows? My beta reader circled it and wrote, “Your characters nodding heads is getting redundant. Just say ‘he nodded.’” It was a small cut, but the whole paragraph instantly read cleaner.
✅ How to Spot and Fix Tautology
Here are some quick tips to hunt down tautology in your drafts:Look for redundancy in phrases.“She whispered softly” → “She whispered.”“He shouted loudly” → “He shouted.”Trust strong words to do their job.
If you write “sprinted,” you don’t need “quickly.”Watch out for double modifiers.“Absolutely essential” → “Essential.”“Unexpected surprise” → “Surprise.”Read aloud.
Your ear will catch what your eyes miss. If it sounds repetitive, it probably is.
📝 Examples in Fiction
Tautology (weak):
She sat down on the chair and looked at the red-coloured rose.
Tighter version:
She sat on the chair and looked at the red rose.
Tautology (weak):
He kicked the ball with his foot.
Tighter version:
He kicked the ball.
See how cutting those redundancies makes the prose sharper?
🎬 Wrapping It Up
Tautology isn’t the end of the world—it’s just one of those sneaky habits we all fall into. But trimming it out makes your writing cleaner, faster, and more professional.
So the next time you revise, hunt down those redundant echoes. Your readers will thank you, and your prose will thank you too.
Your turn: What tautology do you find sneaking into your drafts? Drop it in the comments—I promise, you’re not the only one. I answer all comments personally.
James
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