“Eladria” — the first official blurb/synopsis. What do you think?

I’ve been terrible at keeping this blog updated of late. Oops. I have been busy with various things, including the creation of my new website. It’ll be online as soon as I’m able to commit to a URL. There’s an artist with the same name as me who’s already snatched the URL I wanted, so I’ve had to be a little more creative. I have a title/URL I really like — something a little off-the-wall — but I have to be 100% sure it’s one I’m going to want to stick with before I purchase it.

Anyway, on the website I’ve created a page for my novel “Eladria”. It’s kind of a teaser/preview and I’ve had to brush up the blurb I’ve been wrestling with for months. Why is writing a brief synopsis so darned difficult? I briefly considered hiring a copywriter to do it, but that’s quite an expense for me, and I’d have to know it was absolutely necessary before I’d commit to that.

Here’s the blurb. This is the first time I’ve unveiled it in public! It is, of course, subject to massive change. I’d love to know what you think of it; whether it catches your attention and makes you want to read on, or whether you think it still needs more work. Here goes:

A dire prophecy is fulfilled when Tahnadra’s royal moon is attacked and overthrown by religious extremists. Forced to flee for her life, Princess Eladria, now a fugitive in her own land, finds herself embroiled in a sinister experiment that threatens to destroy her world and countless others. 

With the barriers between dimensions rapidly collapsing, Eladria learns she must travel to the ‘forbidden land’ of Drantak, where a dark and ravenous force seeks to unleash its fury on a universe it was long ago banished from. Only Eladria can prevent a universal armageddon, but in order to do so she must confront a shockingly familiar adversary — and be willing to make a devastating sacrifice…