Six Sentence Sunday: Dialogue, Thoughts and Actions

First off, it’s Mother’s Day (US) and I want to take the opportunity to wish all mothers, mother figures and women in general a happy mother’s day! And now on to Six Sentence Sunday. Good writing, as I was told during a writing workshop, comprises of a good mix of  Dialogue, Thoughts and Actions. It is the only way to capture the character’s reality in full and get the reader to experience the stories as though s/he were in the character’s stead. Well, I’ve done quite a few excerpts with narration and I thought I should do one with a combination of dialogue, thought and action. And as today is mother’s day, I’ve picked a snippet that makes reference to my hero’s mother – something that I think many can relate with.

“Speaking of your mother,” his father said, “she says she hasn’t heard from you in over a week.”

Whenever his mother started complaining, the next thing was to show up at his house, unannounced, and pretend she saw skin and bones, instead of muscle. She’d cook up a storm, trying to fatten him up in one day. He couldn’t afford to have his mother show up tomorrow and ruin his time with Chantelle.

He gave his father a determined look. “I’ll call her tonight.”

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That’s a little scene from Most Eligible Bachelor as my hero determines to ensure his loving mother doesn’t foil his plans to win over his woman. If you enjoyed that snippet, I invite you to read chapter 1.

To learn more about Six Sentence Sunday and/or to find links to over 200 six sentence snippets, go here.

In the meantime, I wish you a very wonderful Mother’s Day and a great week.