WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Drawing Readers into Your Novel

Critique by Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: Seven

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through September 25.

This week’s questions:

1. Does this work?

2. Would a reader want to read on and find out what happens next?

Market/Genre: Science Fiction Political Thriller

On to the diagnosis…
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