WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Piquing Reader Interest on Page One

Critique by Maria D'Marco

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s question:

By diving into the inciting incident in the first 280 words of ch 1, will it peak the reader’s interest or is it too jarring?

Market/Genre: Paranormal Mystery

On to the diagnosis…
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