WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Piquing Reader Curiosity on the First Page

Critique by Maria D'Marco

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: Six

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through July 3.

This week’s questions:

1. Does this piece provide enough information to make you care?

2. How's the voice? Do you get a sense of the character's personality?

3. Would you read on?

4. Would it throw you when later it is revealed that this character is the villain?

Market/Genre: YA Fantasy

On to the diagnosis…
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