My pitch got dissected on Reedsy!

Hey folks, so this is a cheerful post. A few weeks ago I submitted a pitch to Reedsy’s webinar on Perfecting Your Novel's Hook, starring Editors Rebecca Faith Heyman and Jennifer Udden. I listened to it and in the last five minutes, out of 600 submissions, they read mine!

Watch here! Mine starts at (1 hour, 2 mins 26 secs) if you’re curious.   
I sent in my hook, which admittedly is more of a twitter pitch. Normally I’d include a hook as a 1 sentence to round out the story I’ve mentioned in my query letter, but I wanted to give the editors more context, so I included a twitter pitch I’ve used in the past. 

Needless to say, they tore it apart.

This was my pitch:

Sherlock Holmes x Elizabeth Bennett: When she is framed for her fair friend's murder, Plain Jane Poppy must prove her innocence and restore her reputation. In a Georgian-era society where murderers have no manners, Poppy must abandon her ladylike ways to catch a killer.

Here it is after they dissected it:
 
Poppy’s vivacious friend is dead, but Poppy didn’t do it. Unless she wants a veil of suspicion to hang over her head for the rest of her life, Poppy must prove she is not a murderess. In a Georgian-era society where reputation is everything, penniless charity case Poppy must abandon her meek ladylike ways to catch a killer and restore her good name, even if it means risking more scandal to do it.

Thank you to the lovely editors who took apart my hook/pitch, I can’t thank you enough, and to Reedsy for showcasing this and helping me out in my writing. I urge anyone reading this to submit queries to Reedsy’s webinars, you never know if yours will get read!

Feeling inspired,
ELJ