WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at a Romantic Suspense Opening Page

Critique by Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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This week’s questions:

1. Is there enough conflict to wonder what happens next?

2. Is there enough at stake and is it personal to make the reader care? If not, any suggestions?

3. Is the opening all showing or is telling detected?

4. Is the scene grounded enough in description?

5. Is there enough about Malia to make the reader care or sympathize with her?

Market/Genre: Romantic Suspense

On to the diagnosis…
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