WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at a YA Suspense First Page

Critique by Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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Submissions currently in the queue: One

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through February 20.

This week’s questions:

1. Is this opening working?

2. Is there enough emotion?

Market/Genre: Young Adult Suspense

Note: This is a revision of a previous submission. Here’s the original if you’d like to see how the author revised.

On to the diagnosis…

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