WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at Building Tension in a Scene

Critique By Janice Hardy, @Janice_Hardy

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: One

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through February 13.

This week’s questions:

1. What does/doesn't work in this scene?

2. Is there a sense of caring/identifying with the character?

3. Is there enough showing instead of telling?

4. Is the hook strong enough?

Market/Genre: Romantic Suspense

On to the diagnosis…

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