WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at an Urban Fantasy Short Story Opening

Critique By Maria D'Marco

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

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Submissions currently in the queue: One

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are booked through January 23.

This week’s questions:

1. Does it grab attention?

2. Would you read on?

3. Does each character seem to have a personality?

4. Does it work?

Market/Genre: Urban Fantasy Short Story

On to the diagnosis…

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