WIP Diagnostic: Is This Working? A Closer Look at a Short Story Opening

Critique By Maria D'Marco

WIP Diagnostics is a weekly column that studies a snippet of a work in progress for specific issues. Readers are encouraged to send in work with questions, and we diagnose it on the site. It’s part critique, part example, and designed to help the submitter as well as anyone else having a similar problem.

If you're interested in submitting to WIP Diagnostics, please check out these guidelines. 

Submissions currently in the queue: Zero

Please Note: As of today, critique slots are open.

This week’s questions:

1. Does this work as an opening?

2. Would you want to read the rest of the story?

3. Does the dialogue seem appropriate to the scene?

Market/Genre: Fantasy Short Story

On to the diagnosis…

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